雅思写作例文之Workplace rules

Ryan’s proposed response - more inclined to the second view - body only

On one hand, it is not unreasonable that senior employees should be appointed to higher posts. Firstly, the promotion is a form of reward for the employees’ loyalty. Their years of service deserve the employer’s return. Secondly, employers do so in the hope that a long-served staff member makes the full use of his or her wealth of personal connection within the organization to perform a successful managerial role. Nevertheless, not all employees who have served years are competent to play a role in the leadership. A long time of service does not necessarily qualify a person to lead a team. In addition, a time-based promotion mechanism upsets staff’s motivation and aspiration. For example, an institution’s young workforce can be discouraged when they realize they only need to wait for the time.

On the other hand, it is more plausible if the organization puts more stress on candidates’ work performance as an indicator in the decision-making of promotion. The first consideration is that the more accomplished the appointees are, the more capable the management will be, and the more productive the company will be. Furthermore, such a policyvalues staff’s efforts, which stimulatescompetition, which revitalizes/energizesthe organization’s workforce. The organization as a result will thrive. Another reason is that such a mechanism also attracts external talents. Talented professionals would only consider a platform on which their potential can be fully exploited.