雅思写作例文之Parenting

Ryan’s proposed response - agree - body only

The first reality is that the hours that children are accompanied with their parents will dwindle as they need to spend time at school. Before the school age, the majority of children’s active time during a day is occupied by their parents. As soon as they start school, a minimum of six hours of the time will be deducted and used to for school and the parents’ company decreases accordingly and so does their influence.

Secondly, the parents’ presence decreases with children’s engagement with teachers and peers at school, and the decreased presence also reduce parents’ role. Teachers and peers occupy a considerable portion of children’s life. In many cases, teachers and schoolmates’ intervention conflicts with parents’ formed status. For example, teachers may have different rules from parents’ instructions on children, and peer students’ language and behavior become more influential. Both compromise parents’ authority.

Finally, it is a natural condition that children during the growth gradually detach from the parents. The increasing exposure to information and contact with the real world develops children’s self-awareness, which cultivates a child into a more independent mind.