吐血整理 | 5月雅思大小作文合辑

2018年05月05日雅思大作文题目

“Traffic and housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies and factories and their employees to the countryside. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?”

解析&审题

本次作文是2015年6月13日的原题重现。唐老师编写的《9分达人雅思写作真题还原及解析3》180-184页有本题高分范文及解析!

本题的核心问题是：城市的交通和住房压力很大，于是政府鼓励企业搬迁到农村地区去，此举是好还是坏？

我们的惯性思维当然是：此举甚好！因为企业一旦搬出城市，不仅空气好了，交通和住房压力都会大大地降低，同时还会带动农村当地的经济和发展。这些都是很有道理的，但是，大家可能没有想到，当企业搬到农村地区后，很多原来住在城市的工作人员就得往返于农村与城市之间，同时，企业若到农村地区，产品运输也会遇到更多问题。因此，如果政府鼓励企业搬往农村，就应该建立相应的配套基础设施，这样才能既降低城市交通住房压力，同时又保证企业正常经营。

从本期开始，唐老师将结合每周考试真题，给大家谈如何在写作中实现“批判性思维”（critical thinking）。

首先想申明的是，所谓批判性思维并不高深，简单地说就是我们日常生活里常说的“一分为二地看问题”。大家都同意或都反对的观点，我可以从不同角度、不同层次看出这个观点的合理和不合理之处，也就是比别人看得更深、更细、更全面，做到这一点，就可以说你具有了基本的批判思维能力。

本题谈及将大企业搬迁到乡村，以此来解决城市的交通和住房问题。那么，批判性思维在这里如何体现？唐老师认为，可以首先讨论将大企业搬迁到乡村如何可以有助于解决城市交通和住房问题（人口减少导致交通需求下降，住房需求下降），然后转换角度讨论此举潜在的风险：乡村的基础设施落后导致企业不容易生存；企业员工需要在城市和乡村来回奔波等。这样，本题的思维就不是只有一个角度，而是拥有了两个相关的角度（大城市的角度和企业的角度）。好了，从本题中，大家可能已经体会到：转换讨论问题的角度，可以使我们的思维带上批判性的色彩。

 

老师笔记

01

With the economic boom and rapid development of urbanisation, more and more people are now rushing into big cities, which hasimposed great pressure on the urban housing and traffic. As one of the solutions to this problem, the government encourages businesses to move to the rural area, which I believe will be very effective to solve the problem of housing and traffic in cities.

随着经济的繁荣和城市化的快速发展，越来越多的人涌入大城市，这给城市的住房和交通带来了巨大的压力。作为这一问题的解决方案之一，政府鼓励企业迁往农村，我相信这将非常有效地解决城市的住房和交通问题。

解析
（1） 开头段，先引出话题（城市交通和住房压力很大），然后提出自己的观点（大企业迁往乡村有助于解决城市交通和住房问题）。注意本段中with和as短语置于句首，丰富了句式。
（2） boom 繁荣
（3） urbanisation 城市化
（4） impose...on... 把......强加给......
（5）urban 城市的

02

On the one hand, most big cities are suffering from large population and limited resources. If big companies and factories, together with their huge number of employees, move to the countryside, there will be fewer people living in the city, then with the housing pressure reduced, the housing prices will surely go down. Meanwhile, the urban traffic will also improve because the number of commuters to and from work every day is now smaller. On the other hand, businesses moving to rural area will stimulatethe consumption and facilitate infrastructure in this area apart from offering employment opportunities to the local people.

一方面，大多数大城市人口众多，资源有限。如果大公司和工厂，再加上它们数量庞大的员工，搬到农村去，会减少住在城市的人，然后随着住房压力的降低，房价肯定会下降。同时，由于通勤人数的减少，城市交通也将有所改善。另一方面，迁往农村的企业，除了给本地人提供就业机会外，还会刺激消费，促进该地区的基础设施建设。

解析
（1） 本段论述企业搬迁到农村能有效解决城市住房和交通问题，论证方法是因果法：大企业搬迁--城市人口减少--住房压力小--房价下跌；同时，大企业搬迁--上下班人减少--交通改善。本段还顺便谈及大企业搬到乡村对乡村的好处（非重点论述部分，应该提及即可，不要详细论证）。注意范文的语言表述方法。
（2）resource 资源
（3）go down 下降
（4）commuter 通勤人员（按时上下班的人）
（5）stimulate 刺激
（6）consumption 消费（n.）
（7）facilitate 加快；促进
（8）infrastructure 基础设施
（9）employment opportunities 就业机会

03

However, some problems may arise if companies move to the countryside. One problem is that the rural area is generallybackward in transportation and communication system, which may cause great inconveniences for companies. Besides, once manymanufacturing factories rush to the rural areas, the peace and quiet in the areas will be immediately disrupted, hence a lot of environmental and social issues.

然而，如果公司迁往农村，可能会出现一些问题。一个问题是农村交通和通讯系统普遍落后，这可能会给公司造成很大的不方便。此外，一旦许多制造业工厂涌向农村地区，当地的和平与安宁就会被打破，从而产生大量的环境和社会问题。

解析
（1）本段论述企业迁往城市带来的问题（给公司的问题和给乡村带来的问题）。
（2）arise 出现
（3）backward 落后的
（4）manufacturing 制造的
（5）disrupt 打破；干扰
（6）peace and quiet 和平宁静

04

Although there may be transportation, communication and environment problems if businesses move to the country area, I believe it is worth trying because it is an effective way to both solve the traffic and housing problems in major cities and improve the rural economy.

虽然如果企业迁往乡村地区，可能会出现交通、通讯和环境问题，但我认为这是值得一试的，因为这既能有效解决大城市的交通和住房问题，也能改善农村经济。

解析
（1）本段是结论，总结前文的讨论并在重申自己的观点。
（2）be worth doing... 值得做......

 

本场雅思考试范文

With the economic boom and rapid development of urbanisation, more and more people are now rushing into big cities, which has imposed great pressure on the urban housing and traffic. As one of the solutions to this problem, the government encourages businesses to move to the rural area, which I believe will be very effective to solve the problem of housing and traffic in cities.

On the one hand, most big cities are suffering from large population and limited resources. If big companies and factories, together with their huge number of employees, move to the countryside, there will be fewer people living in the city, then with the housing pressure reduced, the housing prices will surely go down. Meanwhile, the urban traffic will also improve because the number of commuters to and from work every day is now smaller. On the other hand, businesses moving to rural area will stimulate the consumption and facilitate infrastructure in this area apart from offering employment opportunities to the local people.

However, some problems may arise if companies move to the countryside. One problem is that the rural area is generally backward in transportation and communication system, which may cause great inconveniences for companies. Besides, once many manufacturing factories rush to the rural areas, the peace and quiet in the areas will be immediately disrupted, hence a lot of environmental and social issues.

Although there may be transportation, communication and environment problems if businesses move to the country area, I believe it is worth trying because it is an effective way to both solve the traffic and housing problems in major cities and improve the rural economy.
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2018年05月12日雅思大作文题目

“Some people think that arts (such as painting and music) do not directly improve people's life, so government should spend money on other areas. Do you agree or disagree?”

解析&审题

本周作文是2012年7月28日的原题再现，同时2013年5月25日的真题也与本次作文高度相仿。

本题的核心在于：政府到底该不该在艺术方面投资？仔细审题，我们会发现题目的前半部分说的是“艺术不能直接改善人们的生活”，也就是说，这个题目已经预设了一个原因，即艺术不直接改善人们的生活。因此，这个题目完整的审题应该是这样的：政府该不该因为艺术不能直接改善人们的生活而不支持艺术？

那么，就这个问题，我们就可以展开讨论。如果认为这个说法很正确，考生就需要论证：
（1）艺术的确不能直接改善人们的生活（甚至可能让人们的生活恶化）；（2）政府的资金应该投向那些直接改善人们生活的领域（比如科技、教育、医疗等）。

反过来，如果不同意这个说法，考生就需要论证：
（1）艺术可以直接改善人们的生活（比如艺术可以给国家带来收入）；（2）即使艺术不直接改善人们的生活，但艺术可以有其他很多功能（比如丰富人们精神生活，在危机时刻甚至可以将一个国家的所有人团结起来）。这样，这个题目其实就变成了讨论艺术的作用。

[批判思维提示] 本题的题目结构是“原因+结果”型，考生在论证时如果同意题目观点，需要同时对原因和结果表示支持并进行论证；如果不同意题目观点，则可以承认原因，但不承认结果（比如可以承认艺术的确不能直接改善人们的生活，但并不能因此就认为政府不该投资艺术，因为艺术还有其他很多重要的功能），也可以对原因进行否定（比如认为艺术实际上可以直接改善人们生活），然后对艺术的其他功能也进行论证。本题给我们的启示是：对题目中给出的原因和结果，我们不要急于去同意，而是要去看看这个原因是否正确，原因和结果之间是否存在必然的因果关系。这个角度给我们提供了批判性的思考机会。

以下请看这个批判思维是如何在高分范文中具体演绎出来的。

 

老师笔记

01

Though some art forms, one perfect example of which is Hollywood movies, can bring in huge revenues for the government, most arts, like painting and music, do not directly bear on our life. However,this does not follow that the government should not invest in such arts.

虽然一些艺术形式，其中一个完美的例子是好莱坞电影，可以为政府带来巨大的收入，但大多数艺术，如绘画和音乐，并没有直接影响我们的生活。然而，这并不意味着政府不应该投资于这样的艺术。

解析
（1）开头段先扬后抑，提出多数艺术都与我们的生活没有直接联系。然后提出全文论点：我们不能因此认为政府不应投资艺术。
（2）revenue （政府或公司的）收入
（3）bear on 与......相关
（4）this does not follow that... 这并不意味着......

02

In the first place, even if arts, when compared with education, health care system, and technologies, do not help much with thematerial aspects of our life, they do have much to do with our emotional and spiritual life. In fact, if we admit that our happinessconsists not only in material contentment but also in spiritual satisfaction, we will have to admit that our life could not do without arts. When we feel sad, we can stand in front of the smiling Monalisa and very soon we may recover from our sadness and regain our peace of mind; we when are happy, we can dance with a beautiful piece of music, which will multiply our happiness.

首先，与教育、医疗系统和技术相比，即使艺术对我们生活的物质方面没有多大帮助，但与我们的情感和精神生活却有很大关系。事实上，如果我们承认我们的幸福不仅在于物质上的满足，还在于精神上的满足，我们就必须承认，没有艺术，我们的生活是无法完成的。当我们感到悲伤的时候，我们可以站在微笑的蒙娜丽莎面前，很快我们就可以从悲伤中恢复过来，重新获得内心的平静；当我们快乐的时候，我们可以随一段美丽的乐曲跳舞，这将让我们的快乐倍增。

解析
（1）本段讨论艺术的个功能：让个人获得精神满足感。论证方法是阐述+例证，首先指出幸福在于物质和精神两个方面，因而我们的生活不能没有艺术。接下来通过举例说明“我们悲伤和开心”时，艺术都能起到作用。这种写作方式摆脱了枯燥的论证，把自己的经历带入作文中，使作文带有很强的个性化特征。
（2）material 物质的
（3）to have much to do with... 与......有很大关系
（4）consist in... 在于......
（5） contentment 满足（n.）
（6） could not do without... 没有......不行
（7）peace of mind 心灵的平静
（8）multiply 倍增；乘

03

Besides, arts may have an even more important role to play in getting people of a troubled nation united as one and fight the problem they have. We all know how Winston Churchill’s powerful speech had encouraged British people to fight Nazis bravely in the Second World War, and how Martin Luther King’s “I Have a Dream” had motivated African Americans to pursue the social justice they deserved in the Civil Rights Movement. Today, arts that have appeared right after 9/11 terrorist attack have in the same way effectively brought Americans together in face of thenightmare.

此外，艺术可能会发挥更重要的作用，使一个陷入困境的国家的人民团结在一起，与他们面临的问题作斗争。我们都知道温斯顿·丘吉尔的有力演讲鼓励英国人民在第二次世界大战中勇敢地与纳粹作战，马丁·路德·金的“我有一个梦想”促使非洲裔美国人在民权运动中追求他们应得的社会正义。今天，9·11恐怖袭击后出现的艺术，同样有效地将美国人团结在一起，面对噩梦。

解析
（1）本段论述艺术对于整个国家的作用：在国家遇到麻烦的时候，艺术具有振奋人心的作用。本段使用三个例证来论证，请注意范文举例时语言使用的简洁性。
（2）a troubled nation 陷入困境的国家
（3）motivate 激励；激发
（4）social justice 社会公正
（5）deserve 应得
（6）nightmare 噩梦

04

In summary, far from being illusionary and useless as some people might think, arts can be very important in our life, both to the individuals and to the nation as a whole. To maintain a healthy androbust society, therefore, the government should not marginalizethe arts.

总之，艺术并不像某些人想象的那样虚幻和无用，艺术在我们的生活中是非常重要的，无论对个人还是对整个国家都是如此。因此，为了维持社会的健康和稳固，政府不应将艺术边缘化。

解析
（1）本段是结论，总结前文的讨论，提出艺术对个人和国家都非常重要，认为政府不应该将艺术边缘化。注意范文结尾实现了“总结+延伸”的基本结构。
（2）illusionary 虚幻的
（3）maintain 维持
（4）robust 稳固的
（5）marginalize 使......边缘化

 

本场雅思考试范文

Though some art forms, one perfect example of which is Hollywood movies, can bring in huge revenues for the government, most arts, like painting and music, do not directly bear on our life. However, this does not follow that the government should not invest in such arts.

In the first place, even if arts, when compared with education, health care system, and technologies, do not help much with the material aspects of our life, they do have much to do with our emotional and spiritual life. In fact, if we admit that our happiness consists not only in material contentment but also in spiritual satisfaction, we will have to admit that our life could not do without arts. When we feel sad, we can stand in front of the smiling Monalisa and very soon we may recover from our sadness and regain our peace of mind; we when are happy, we can dance with a beautiful piece of music, which will multiply our happiness.

Besides, arts may have an even more important role to play in getting people of a troubled nation united as one and fight the problem they have. We all know how Winston Churchill’s powerful speech had encouraged British people to fight Nazis bravely in the Second World War, and how Martin Luther King’s “I Have a Dream” had motivated African Americans to pursue the social justice they deserved in the Civil Rights Movement. Today, arts that have appeared right after 9/11 terrorist attack have in the same way effectively brought Americans together in face of the nightmare.

In summary, far from being illusionary and useless as some people might think, arts can be very important in our life, both to the individuals and to the nation as a whole. To maintain a healthy and robust society, therefore, the government should not marginalize the arts.
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2018年05月19日雅思大作文题目

“In many countries, people can eat a wide variety of food grown in other areas today. As a result, they eat more food from other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of the development outweigh disadvantages?”

解析&审题

本题是2016年8月13日的原题重现，与2017年5月13日的真题也基本相同。

当今是全球化时代，我们的日常生活中充满了外来的元素，只不过我们很少去关注：我们穿的衣服，吃的食品，乘坐的汽车或者飞机，几乎没有什么东西没有外来的痕迹。

 

那么，在这个大背景下，我们该如何讨论本次雅思写作话题呢？

关于食用更多外来食品，而不是本地食品，就如使用其他产品一样，肯定是利弊参半。

好的地方，无非是丰富了我们的食物选择，改善了我们的营养结构，这是从消费者个人而言的。那么，对于整个食品产业，无疑会增加产业的竞争，从而提高服务质量，但是坏处也由此而产生：如果消费者大量食用外来食品，这无疑会挫伤国内食品产业的发展。

谈及个人观点，我们可以这样认为，虽然在短期内国内食品产业可能受损，但是从长远看，竞争导致提高，从而可以促进国内食品产业走向世界，因此反而变成一件好事，由此得出结论：消费者食用外来食品，无论对个人还是对整个食品产业，都是一件好事。

[批判性思维提示] 本题的核心是：食用外来食品（而非本地食品）到底是好还是坏？唐老师的思路是分两种情况来讨论：对消费者而言，这是增加了食品选择，改善了营养结构，当然是好事；对本地食品业而言，则可能产生负面的影响。那到底是好处多还是坏处多？唐老师则从竞争可以导致质量提高的角度，认为食用外来食品可以提高本地产业的竞争力。因此，在讨论某种现象是好还是坏时，考生可以分不同人群（或不同层次）来进行讨论，任何一个现象都不可能是的坏，也不可能是地坏。这样，我们就获得了一种批判性的思考方式。
[同类真题回顾] “食品”一直是雅思写作考试中的常客，经常出现。以下是历年真题回顾：

2010.12.11          

 Junk food does harm to people's health. Therefore, some experts find educationan effective way to prevent/stop people from eating the food. However, someone finds the education insignificant. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
教育能否让人们不再吃垃圾食品？

2011.12.3
Today food travel thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers.Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend?
从农场到消费者，食品要历经千山万水。为什么？这是好还是不好？

 2014.12.13
Shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drink that has been scientifically proved to be bad for people’s health. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
 应该禁止商店销售那些已经被科学证明是有害人们身体的食品和饮料吗？

2016.3.12
In modern life, it is no longer necessary to use animals as food and in other products like clothing and medicines. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
现在，我们已经没有必要将动物用作食物、衣服和医药。你是否同意？

2017.5.13
In some countries, it is possible for people to have a variety of food imported from all over the world. To what extent do you think its benefits outweigh the drawbacks? 在一些国家，人们可以吃到各种舶来的食品。你认为这是好还是不好

 

老师笔记

01

30 years ago, American fast food brands such as McDonald, KFC, and Subway were basically unheard of in China, but now they have become everyday words to Chinese people who have probablyconsumed the greatest amount of American fast food in the world. Though the introduction of food from other regions is not without negative effects, I do think it is positive to both the individual consumers and the food industry as a whole.

30年前，麦当劳、肯德基和赛百味等美国快餐品牌在中国基本上是闻所未闻的，但现在它们已成为中国人的日常用语，中国人可能消费了世界上最多的美国快餐。虽然从其他地区引进食品并非没有负面影响，但我认为这对个体消费者和整个食品行业都是积极的。

解析
（1）开头段对题目所提的现象（即人们可以广泛使用外来食品）进行细化描写，引入话题，并提出自己的观点。
（2）basically 基本上
（3）...is unheard of ......是闻所未闻
（4）consume 消费
（5）...is not without... 不无......
（6）food industry 食品业
（7）as a whole 作为整体地

02

With greater variety of food coming from outside, we can enjoy a better nutritional structure and greater freedom to choose our favorite food. Now we all know that eggplants and potatoes arevital to our health, but very few know they were originally grown in Mexico and Ireland and were not imported to China until after the 18th century. So the food from other regions has offered us more nutritional choices. Instead of just taking soy bean milk, many people today have cow milk; instead of just taking breads, many people now have sandwiches as well.

有了更多的来自外部的食物，我们可以享受更好的营养结构和更大的自由选择我们最喜欢的食物。现在我们都知道茄子和土豆对我们的健康非常重要，但很少有人知道，它们最初生长在墨西哥和爱尔兰，直到18世纪以后才被引进到中国。所以来自其他地区的食物为我们提供了更多的营养选择。今天，许多人不只喝豆浆，还喝牛奶；不仅吃面包，还吃三明治。

解析
（1）本段讨论引进外来食品对个体消费者的好处：改进营养结构，提供更多选择。本段主要使用举例法（包括茄子、土豆；豆浆，牛奶；面包，三明治），围绕的主题是来自其他地区的食品改善了我们的营养结构，并给我们更多选择。
（2）variety 种类
（3）nutritional structure 营养结构
（4）vital 至关重要的
（5）originally 首先；起先
（6）not...until... 直到......才......

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Some may argue that the importation of foreign food may impairthe local food industry. This may be true in some cases. We have seen many local food brands become obsolete when their foreignreplacements are introduced to the market. However, I believe theintensified competition resulting from the arrival of the foreign food is beneficial to the long-term development of the local food industry, because it will compel the local food companies to improve the quality of their products, which in turn will make them more competitive in the global market.

有些人可能会说，进口外国食物可能会损害本地的食物业。这在某些情况下可能是正确的。我们已经看到，当外来的替代品被引入时，许多本地食品品牌消失了。然而，我相信，外来食品的到来所带来的激烈竞争，对本地食品工业的长远发展是有利的，因为这将迫使当地食品公司提高产品质量，而这无疑将使它们在全球市场上更具竞争力。

解析
（1）本段讨论引进外来食品与本地食品业发展之间的关系。首先指出，外来食品的确可能损害本地食品业，然后转折过来，说明外来食品带来的竞争迫使本地企业提高质量，而这个从长远看会提高其在全球市场上的竞争力。
（2）impair损害；伤害
（3）in some cases 在某些情况下
（4）obsolete过时的
（5）replacement替换品
（6）intensified加剧的
（7）result from 由......引起
（8）long-term长远的
（9）compel 迫使
（10）in turn 反过来
（11）competitive 有竞争力的
（12）global market 全球市场

04

Thus, that people are able to consume more and more food from other countries and regions gives a favorable opportunity to both the individual consumers and the entire food industry. It is, therefore, advisable for us to embrace this development, rather than rejecting it.

因此，人们能够消费越来越多的来自其他国家和地区的食品，为个人消费者和整个食品行业提供了一个有利的机会。因此，我们非常好接受这一发展，而不是拒绝它。

解析
（1）本段为结论段，重申观点。好的结尾段应该包括两个内容：一是对前文的总结，二是适当的延伸。因此，好作文的结尾段通常都是两句话组成。
（2）favorable有利的
（3）advisable明智的
（4）embrace拥抱；欢迎
（5）reject 拒绝

 

本场雅思考试范文

30 years ago, American fast food brands such as McDonald, KFC, and Subway were basically unheard of in China, but now they have become everyday words to Chinese people who have probably consumed the greatest amount of American fast food in the world. Though the introduction of food from other regions is not without negative effects, I do think it is positive to both the individual consumers and the food industry as a whole.

With greater variety of food coming from outside, we can enjoy a better nutritional structure and greater freedom to choose our favorite food. Now we all know that eggplants and potatoes are vital to our health, but very few know they were originally grown in Mexico and Ireland and were not imported to China until after the 18th century. So the food from other regions has offered us more nutritional choices. Instead of just taking soy bean milk, many people today have cow milk; instead of just taking breads, many people now have sandwiches as well.

Some may argue that the importation of foreign food may impair the local food industry. This may be true in some cases. We have seen many local food brands become obsolete when their foreign replacements are introduced to the market. However, I believe the intensified competition resulting from the arrival of the foreign food is beneficial to the long-term development of the local food industry, because it will compel the local food companies to improve the quality of their products, which in turn will make them more competitive in the global market.

Thus, that people are able to consume more and more food from other countries and regions gives a favorable opportunity to both the individual consumers and the entire food industry. It is, therefore, advisable for us to embrace this development, rather than rejecting it.
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2018年05月24日雅思大作文题目

“Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic (educational), social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.”

解析&审题

本题是一个典型的“报道型”（report）作文题目，要求考生对某个现象或问题进行原因分析，并给出解决办法。本题是一个比较新的题目。

我们需要找到题目中的关键词。
首先，children很关键，本题要求我们讨论的主人公是“孩子”，因此本题非常好不要过多讨论大学生，更不可讨论更宽泛意义上的“人”。

其次，题目中已经给定了“学业”（academic）、“社会”（social）、“金钱”（commercial）三个层次的压力，

因此讨论原因的时候非常好都要涉及（虽然可以根据情况进行详略选择）。
以下是本题高分范文。

 

老师笔记

01

What do you think makes children unhappy today? Researchers arepointing at the pressures from various perspectives—academic, social and commercial. While the causes of these pressures seem clear enough, there are no simple measures to reduce them.

你认为是什么让今天的孩子们不开心？研究人员指出是各类压力造成，包括学习、社会和金钱压力。虽然这些压力的原因似乎很清楚，却没有简单的措施来减少这些压力。

解析
（1）本范文开门见山，直接提出问题（孩子们为什么压力越来越大），然后提出自己的观点（解决不容易）。
（2）point at 指向......
（3）perspective 角度
（4）reduce 减少；减轻

02

It is easy to explain why children are facing academic, social and commercial pressures. Firstly, although as parents there are fewpleasures greater than their children succeeding at school, sometimes the pressure is way too much. Parents’unrealistically high expectations can backfire severely and end up causing their children to be unhappy. Secondly, all children have to face peer pressure in school, which is generally beneficial to kids’ growth, yet the ugly reality is that peer pressure reaches its highest intensity at just the age when children tend to be so insensitive, unkind, even cruel as to purposefully make others unhappy. Thirdly, children are easily affected by advertising that attracts them to buy things they cannot possibly afford, and as a result, they may feel unhappy.

很容易解释为什么孩子们面临着学业、社会和金钱压力。首先，尽管父母的非常大快乐就是孩子在学校取得成功，但有时他们施加的压力太过了。父母不切实际的高期望值可能会适得其反，最终导致孩子不快乐。第二，所有的孩子在学校都要面对同龄人的压力，这通常有利于孩子的成长，但丑陋的现实是，同龄人压力达到最强烈的年龄正是孩子们不敏感，不友好，甚至是残酷到故意让别人不开心的年龄。第三，儿童很容易受到广告的影响，这些广告吸引他们购买他们负担不起的东西，因此他们可能为此感到不开心。

解析
（1）本段讨论孩子们为什么面临各种压力，提出三个原因：来自父母的原因，来自同龄人的原因，来自广告的原因，分别涉及学业压力（父母的高期望值）、社会压力（同龄竞争）、金钱压力（广告的影响）。这些原因不难想到，但请各位烤鸭注意范文在语言表达方面的节奏和技巧（尤其是从句的使用）。
（2）pleasure 快乐；愉悦
（3）way too much 太过了
（4）unrealistically 不切实际地
（5）backfire 回火；事与愿违
（6）end up 最终落得个......
（7）peer pressure 同龄人压力
（8）intensity 强度
（9）purposefully 有意地
（10）afford 负担得起

03

Though it is never easy to fix these feelings of unhappiness, there are possible measures to be taken to enhance the wellbeing of children who are under constant pressures. To begin with, parents have to draw a line on the expectations of their children and find out their true potentials, rather than pushing them to unrealistic limits. Meanwhile, with patience and guidance, parents shouldkeep an eye on their children who fall victims to online pressure through social networking. Simultaneously, the authorities should do more to regulate advertising that are intended for children who are anxious to buy unnecessary things.

尽管克服这些不快乐的感觉从来都不容易，但我们可能会采取一些措施来提高长期处于压力中的孩子的幸福感。首先，父母要给孩子们的期望划一条线，发现他们真正的潜力，而不是把他们逼到不切实际的极限。同时，在耐心和引导下，父母应该关注那些在社交网络上承受网络压力的孩子们。同时，政府应该做更多的工作来规范针对儿童的广告，因为儿童总是迫不及待地购买并不必要的东西。

解析
（1）本段讨论解决办法。一般说来，解决办法应该针对前文提出的原因。这里的解决办法有三：一、父母调整自己的期待值；二、警惕孩子在网络上的同伴压力；三、政府规范儿童广告。这些解决办法完全针对第二段中分析到的三个原因。
（2）fix 解决
（3）enhance 提高
（4）constant 长期的
（5）potential 潜力（的）
（6）keep an eye on... 关注......
（7）fall victim to... 沦为......的牺牲品
（8）simultaneously 同时

04

In conclusion, there are no easy solutions to the increasing academic, social, and commercial pressures children face today.Frankly, I am quite pessimistic because those factors that bring pressures to children are not likely to go away, at least in the foreseeable future.

总之，对于孩子今天面临的日益增长的学业、社会和金钱压力，没有容易的解决办法。坦白地说，我很悲观，因为那些给孩子们带来压力的因素，至少在可预见的将来是不可能消失的。

解析
（1）本段为结论段，重申观点。好的结尾段应该包括两个内容：一是对前文的总结，二是适当的延伸。因此，好作文的结尾段通常都是两句话组成。
（2）frankly 坦白地说
（3）pessimistic 悲观的
（4）in the foreseeable future 在可见的未来

 

本场雅思考试范文

What do you think makes children unhappy today? Researchers are pointing at the pressures from various perspectives—academic, social and commercial. While the causes of these pressures seem clear enough, there are no simple measures to reduce them.
 
It is easy to explain why children are facing academic, social and commercial pressures. Firstly, although as parents there are few pleasures greater than their children succeeding at school, sometimes the pressure is way too much. Parents’ unrealistically high expectations can backfire severely and end up causing their children to be unhappy. Secondly, all children have to face peer pressure in school, which is generally beneficial to kids’ growth, yet the ugly reality is that peer pressure reaches its highest intensity at just the age when children tend to be so insensitive, unkind, even cruel as to purposefully make others unhappy. Thirdly, children are easily affected by advertising that attracts them to buy things they cannot possibly afford, and as a result, they may feel unhappy.
 
Though it is never easy to fix these feelings of unhappiness, there are possible measures to be taken to enhance the wellbeing of children who are under constant pressures. To begin with, parents have to draw a line on the expectations of their children and find out their true potentials, rather than pushing them to unrealistic limits. Meanwhile, with patience and guidance, parents should keep an eye on their children who fall victims to online pressure through social networking. Simultaneously, the authorities should do more to regulate advertising that are intended for children who are anxious to buy unnecessary things.
 
In conclusion, there are no easy solutions to the increasing academic, social, and commercial pressures children face today. Frankly, I am quite pessimistic because those factors that bring pressures to children are not likely to go away, at least in the foreseeable future.
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