10月27日写作真题参考范文 | 年轻人应该多在家还是在外面娱乐？

2018年10月27日

雅思大作文题目

 

“ Some people think that young people should spend more of their free time at home with their family instead of entertaining outside. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. ”

解析&审题

本周大作文是一个关于年轻人的生活话题：年轻人到底应该是多和家人在一起，还是应该多在外面寻找乐趣？也许有些同学会单方面地认为年轻人应该多与家人在一起。但其实，这个题目非常好做双边讨论，因为年轻人一方面需要在家里培养与家人的感情，但另一方面，年轻人也应该去外面参加一些娱乐活动以疏导内心的压力，或者发展自己的兴趣爱好等。

唐老师在与很多烤鸭交流的过程中发现，同学们喜欢采取非此即彼的思维方式，即采用一边倒的结构方式。这种方式也不是不正确，甚至有些题目用这种方式写起来更顺畅，但我们千万不要忘记，如果题目中有两个对立的观点，我们必须要对他们都进行讨论。即使在一边倒的结构中，我们也要对对立的观点进行驳斥，不能对其置之不理。如果你对题目中给出的反方观点置之不理，你在Task Response这一项上就会丢分。

接下来请阅读唐老师提供的高分范文，看看唐老师怎样具体用语言来表达以上观点。

 

老师笔记

 

01

Today’s young people tend to see themselves as the masters of their own free time, and they can do whatever they want to do. In my opinion, however, parents need to help the youngsters to exercise their freedom in a more balanced way, consciously between family love and entertainment fun.

今天的年轻人倾向于把自己看作是自己空闲时间的主人，他们可以做任何他们想做的事情。然而，在我看来，父母需要帮助孩子们有意识地在家人之爱和娱乐休闲之间以一种更加平衡的方式来行使他们的自由。

 

解析

（1） 段提出话题，并提出自己的观点。

（2） exercise 行使；练习

（3） balanced 均衡的

（4） consciously 有意识地

 

02

On the one hand, enjoying quality time together is very important for a strong family. It is because the more opportunities the family have for quality time, the stronger the family are in terms of emotional bond. The family activities that young people can engage in include eating meals together, talking about the events of the day, sharing joys and defeats, doing household chores together and spending evenings watching TV. All these things can send a strong message of family love, which is the overall positive side about juveniles staying more at home. To some, these activities may seem not always necessary, but without them, it is impossible for young people to learn to love the family. 

一方面，在一起享受美好时光对于一个团结的家庭来说是非常重要的。这是因为家庭拥有美好时间的机会越多，家庭的情感纽带就越强。年轻人可以参加的家庭活动包括一起吃饭，谈论一天中的事情，分享快乐和失败，一起做家务，晚上看电视，等。所有这些都能传递出强烈的家人之爱的信息，而这正是青少年多住在家里的积极一面。对一些人来说，这些活动似乎并非总是必要的，但没有他们，年轻人不可能学会如何爱家人。

解析

（1） 本段主要论述孩子们多与家人一起的重要性。本段没有列举各种重要性，而是将重点放在“家人之爱”（family love）这一点上。

（2） bond 纽带

（3） engage in 从事

（4） household chores 家务活

（5） overall 整体的

（6） juvenile 青少年（的）

 

03

On the other hand, the younger generation may want their fun time outside and get away from the boring daily routine. This is also important because young people are full of energy which needs to be channeled in positive forms. For example, shopping in malls or going to parties can be a good form that helps young people to grow up healthily from adolescence to adulthood by making them more independent and responsible. In fact, they need to do things for fun, in order to explore their own interests or make friends. Of course, when going to extremes, this trend might bring negative effects, including the widening of generation gap between parents and children.

另一方面，年轻一代可能希望在外面度过快乐时光，远离无聊的日常生活。这一点也很重要，因为年轻人充满了精力，需要以积极的形式加以疏导。例如，在购物中心购物或参加聚会是一种很好的方式，可以帮助年轻人更独立，更有责任心，从而帮助他们从青春期到成年的健康成长。事实上，为了探索自己的兴趣或交朋友，他们需要做一些有趣的事情。当然，当走向极端时，这种趋势可能会带来负面影响，包括父母和孩子之间代沟的扩大。

 

解析

（1） 本段主要论述年轻人应该在外参加娱乐活动的原因：摆脱无聊的日常琐事；疏导能量，健康成长；发展兴趣交朋友。

（2） routine 日常需要做的事情

（3） channel 渠道；疏导

（4） adolescence 青春期

（5） explore 发现；探索

 

04

In conclusion, there are positive effects about young people who spend their free time for both family love and entertainment fun. Parents need to see to it that youth under their care should live a more balanced life. Young people themselves also need to be prudent in making their choices.

总之，把空闲时间花在家人之爱和娱乐休闲上，对年轻人来说都有好处。父母需要他们照顾下的年轻人能过一种更加均衡的生活，年轻人自己在作出选择时也需要谨慎。

解析

（1） 本段给出自己的观点：两种做法都有好处，因此应该均衡。

（2） see to it that... 为......负责；......

（3） prudent 谨慎的

 

7分范文

Today’s young people tend to see themselves as the masters of their own free time, and they can do whatever they want to do. In my opinion, however, parents need to help the youngsters to exercise their freedom in a more balanced way, consciously between family love and entertainment fun.

On the one hand, enjoying quality time together is very important for a strong family. It is because the more opportunities the family have for quality time, the stronger the family are in terms of emotional bond. The family activities that young people can engage in include eating meals together, talking about the events of the day, sharing joys and defeats, doing household chores together and spending evenings watching TV. All these things can send a strong message of family love, which is the overall positive side about juveniles staying more at home. To some, these activities may seem not always necessary, but without them, it is impossible for young people to learn to love the family.

On the other hand, the younger generation may want their fun time outside and get away from the boring daily routine. This is also important because young people are full of energy which needs to be channeled in positive forms. For example, shopping in malls or going to parties can be a good form that helps young people to grow up healthily from adolescence to adulthood by making them more independent and responsible. In fact, they need to do things for fun, in order to explore their own interests or make friends. Of course, when going to extremes, this trend might bring negative effects, including the widening of generation gap between parents and children.

In conclusion, there are positive effects about young people who spend their free time for both family love and entertainment fun. Parents need to see to it that youth under their care should live a more balanced life. Young people themselves also need to be prudent in making their choices.

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建议背诵的句子

 

1. In my opinion, however, parents need to help the youngsters to exercise their freedom in a more balanced way, consciously between family love and entertainment fun.

然而，在我看来，父母需要帮助孩子们有意识地在家人之爱和娱乐休闲之间以一种更加平衡的方式来行使他们的自由。

2. The more opportunities the family have for quality time, the stronger the family are in terms of emotional bond.

家庭拥有美好时间的机会越多，家庭的情感纽带就越强。

3. Shopping in malls or going to parties can be a good form that helps young people to grow up healthily from adolescence to adulthood by making them more independent and responsible.

在购物中心购物或参加聚会是一种很好的方式，可以帮助年轻人更独立，更有责任心，从而帮助他们从青春期到成年的健康成长。

4. Parents need to see to it that youth under their care should live a more balanced life.

父母需要他们照顾下的年轻人能过一种更加均衡的生活。

 

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