2019.4.6雅思大作文真题参考范文-在城市中心建公寓楼可减少通勤时间吗？

2019年4月6日

雅思大作文题目

在城市中心建公寓楼可减少通勤时间吗？

 

“Some people think that the best way to reduce time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.   ”

解析&审题

听不少参加考试的同学说把本题理解错误了，老雅感到非常遗憾，因为这个题目审偏比审对还要难！

有位同学这样审题：为了减少旅游时间，城市中心附近应该多修公寓；还有位同学这样审题：为了减轻交通压力，应该在城市中心公寓附近修公园。这都是哪跟哪啊？逻辑也不顺啊！遇到这种情况，多花点时间好好读一读题目，行不行？这样审题，也就意味着这次考试全部失败了。所有的努力都付之东流，所有的期待都烟消云散，是可惜，孰不可惜！

当然，绝大多数同学这次都是正确审题了：为了减少上下班花在路上的时间，有人觉得非常好的办法是把城市中心附近的公园都变成公寓，但其他人不同意这个办法。

题目中出现the best way，在雅思考试里很常见。比如“为了降低交通事故，非常好的办法是提高驾驶的最小年龄”，“为了减轻交通压力，非常好的办法是征拥堵税“，“为了帮助孩子学习，非常好的办法是让他们多看电视”等等。这类题目的答题思路一般都是：首先承认并论证题目中提出的办法的确有用，然后找出这个办法的缺陷并提出更好的办法。

把城市中心附近的公园都变成公寓，上下班的人就不用住在很远的地方，他们甚至可以从公寓里步行到公司上班，这无疑会减少他们花费在路上的时间（travelling time / commuting time）【承认其合理性】；但是如果城市中心附近都是公寓，会让本已拥挤的城市变得更加拥挤，本已很污染的城市变得更加污染，而在这样的钢筋水泥楼房中办公，会增加人们的焦虑感，降低其工作效率，从而在很大程度上抵消了（offset / undo）降低通勤时间带来的好处（benefits）【讨论其缺陷性】；为了降低通勤时间，其实还有其他更好的办法，比如利用远程通讯技术，让大家尽量在家里上班【提出替代方案】。

 

以下是唐老师原创高分范文，供大家研习。

老师笔记

01

With the expansion of cities, people have to spend more and more time travelling to and from work. As one solution to this problem, it is suggested that apartment buildings should be planted near the city centre in place of parks and gardens. 

随着城市的扩大，人们不得不花越来越多的时间上下班。作为解决这一问题的办法，有人建议在市中心附近建公寓大楼来取代公园和花园。

解析

（1）开篇提出问题，并重述题目中的观点。

（2）Expansion 扩张

（3）To and from work 上下班

（4）Solution 解决办法

 

02

This idea, if well carried out, can be rather effective in reducing the commuting time for many workers. Living in the apartment buildings close to work can help save a lot of time because the commuters do not have to travel that much. They can even walk to their offices. This is actually a beautiful dream for many who have been troubled by the heavy traffic in big cities on their way to and from work. 

这个想法如果得到很好的执行，可以相当有效地减少许多工人的通勤时间。住在离工作很近的公寓楼里可以节省很多时间，因为通勤不需要走那么远。他们甚至可以步行到办公室。对于许多大城市里受困于上下班交通问题的人来说，这实际上是一个美丽的梦。

解析

（1）本段讨论在城市中心建公寓楼可以有效解决通勤时间问题。

（2）Carry out 执行

（3）The commuting time 通勤时间

（4）Close to work 工作地点附近的

 

03

On second thoughts, however, the dream may not be that beautiful at all. We can hardly imagine what the city centre would look like when millions of people moved into the numerous apartment buildings there. It would become a great deal more crowded and polluted than before. To make it worse, when they need to find a park or garden so that they can take a little rest, people would have to spend a few hours travelling out of town. Working and living in such a busy and noisy environment, people would not be able to find the pleasure that is so important for their work and life, and the benefits they have gained from the shortened travelling time would be undone to a large extent. 

然而，再想一想，这个梦可能一点也不美。我们很难想象当数以百万计的人搬进市中心无数公寓楼时，那里会是什么样子。它将变得比以前更加拥挤和污染。更糟糕的是，当人们需要找一个公园或花园可以稍稍休息一下时，他们将不得不花几个小时出城。在如此繁忙和嘈杂的环境中工作和生活，人们将无法找到对他们的工作和生活如此重要的乐趣，他们从缩短的通勤时间中获得的利益在很大程度上将被抵消。

解析

（1）本段论述人们住在市中心公寓大楼的坏处。

（2）On second thoughts 再想一想

（3）To make it worse 更糟糕的是

（4）Undo 抵消；取消

（5）To a large extent 在很大程度上

 

04

In fact, in order to reduce the commuting time, there are better measures than having more apartment buildings in the city centre. One such measure is to take advantage of the advanced telecommunication technologies which enable people to work from home. This will save them from travelling a long way to work and at the same time maintain their positive feeling towards life and work.

实际上，为了缩短通勤时间，有比在市中心建更多的公寓楼更好的措施。其中一项措施是利用先进的通讯技术，使人们能够在家工作。这将使他们避免走很远去上班，同时又保持他们对生活和工作的积极感觉。

解析

(1) 本段提出更好的办法，可以避免在城市中心建公寓楼带来的问题。

(2) Take advantage of 利用

(3) Save ... from... 把......从......解脱出来

 

7分范文

With the expansion of cities, people have to spend more and more time travelling to and from work. As one solution to this problem, it is suggested that apartment buildings should be planted near the city centre in place of parks and gardens. 

This idea, if well carried out, can be rather effective in reducing the commuting time for many workers. Living in the apartment buildings close to work can help save a lot of time because the commuters do not have to travel that much. They can even walk to their offices. This is actually a beautiful dream for many who have been troubled by the heavy traffic in big cities on their way to and from work. 

On second thoughts, however, the dream may not be that beautiful at all. We can hardly imagine what the city centre would look like when millions of people moved into the numerous apartment buildings there. It would become a great deal more crowded and polluted than before. To make it worse, when they need to find a park or garden so that they can take a little rest, people would have to spend a few hours travelling out of town. Working and living in such a busy and noisy environment, people would not be able to find the pleasure that is so important for their work and life, and the benefits they have gained from the shortened travelling time would be undone to a large extent. 

In fact, in order to reduce the commuting time, there are better measures than having more apartment buildings in the city centre. One such measure is to take advantage of the advanced telecommunication technologies which enable people to work from home. This will save them from travelling a long way to work and at the same time maintain their positive feeling towards life and work.

（310 words)

 

建议背诵的句子

1. Living in the apartment buildings close to work can help save a lot of time because the commuters do not have to travel that much.

住在离工作很近的公寓楼里可以节省很多时间，因为通勤不需要走那么远。

2. This is actually a beautiful dream for many who have been troubled by the heavy traffic in big cities on their way to and from work. 

对于许多大城市里受困于上下班交通问题的人来说，这实际上是一个美丽的梦。

3. We can hardly imagine what the city centre would look like when millions of people moved into the numerous apartment buildings there.

我们很难想象当数以百万计的人搬进市中心无数公寓楼时，那里会是什么样子。

4. Working and living in such a busy and noisy environment, people would not be able to find the pleasure that is so important for their work and life, and the benefits they have gained from the shortened travelling time would be undone to a large extent. 

在如此繁忙和嘈杂的环境中工作和生活，人们将无法找到对他们的工作和生活如此重要的乐趣，他们从缩短的通勤时间中获得的利益在很大程度上将被抵消。

5. One such measure is to take advantage of the advanced telecommunication technologies which enable people to work from home.

其中一项措施是利用先进的通讯技术，使人们能够在家工作。

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